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Imperial Guard Message Board :: General :: Fluff :: Alpha Strike: Letters from the 08th Corvis Author Topic: Alpha Strike: Letters from the 08th Corvis (Read 69 times) Julian Sharps WARLORD member is offline By the time you hear them, it'll be too late to run. Joined: Mar 2009 Gender: Male Posts: 1,039 Location: Incoming Alpha Strike: Letters from the 08th Corvis « Thread Started on Nov 8, 2009, 12:22am » http://alphastrike-nanowrimo.blogspot.com/ I realize that I've been having problems continuing my fluff writing (I've started two threads before this, and neither got off the ground), so I decided to take advantage of the NaNoWriMo challenge to motivate me to write a 50,000-word story before the end of November (Personally, I'm hoping for more around 40,000 words, if you get my meaning ). To save on forum space, I will not be posting the story directly on this thread; instead, I advise readers to click on the link above. Comments are appreciated, so feel free to either post them here or on the site itself, if you so choose. Link to Post - Back to Top   Logged Brothers-in-Arms: Aeon, Reds and Royals, Batou, John Galt, Shugotenshi, Scarper, WILLEM, Vesuviushetlan, Rolling Thunder Sisters-in-Arms: Sister Galatea, Makarova Quote: "Your cunning plan would have worked, if not for one thing. Me." - Rolling Thunder Current Record (W/L/D) 08th Corvis: 9-4-4 08th Corvis (5th Ed): 9-2-3 501st Emperor's Fists: 6-2-0 Julian Sharps WARLORD member is offline By the time you hear them, it'll be too late to run. Joined: Mar 2009 Gender: Male Posts: 1,039 Location: Incoming Re: Alpha Strike: Letters from the 08th Corvis « Reply #1 on Nov 10, 2009, 8:01pm » No one likes my story... Link to Post - Back to Top   Logged Brothers-in-Arms: Aeon, Reds and Royals, Batou, John Galt, Shugotenshi, Scarper, WILLEM, Vesuviushetlan, Rolling Thunder Sisters-in-Arms: Sister Galatea, Makarova Quote: "Your cunning plan would have worked, if not for one thing. Me." - Rolling Thunder Current Record (W/L/D) 08th Corvis: 9-4-4 08th Corvis (5th Ed): 9-2-3 501st Emperor's Fists: 6-2-0 KaikelX WARLORD member is online Missing in Action. Presumed KIA Joined: Mar 2009 Posts: 1,196 Location: Unknown Re: Alpha Strike: Letters from the 08th Corvis « Reply #2 on Nov 10, 2009, 8:49pm » Very nice. However, one thing I noticed was a little formatting. It would be nice if used breaks when the P.O.V changed, so that it's easier to know who or what side you're following. Also, please caution readers to read from the bottom up. I was going to right about making sure you had an overall plot line, before taking a careful look at the phases, and realizing that I read the whole thing chapter by chapter, but backwards. But very nice story. Heh. Colonel Sharps...... Link to Post - Back to Top   Logged Major Kaikel Xiang: MIA Captain Kirlia Asis: MIA Inquisitor Lord Emery Rayet: MIA 482nd Hell's Bane: Location Unknown Julian Sharps WARLORD member is offline By the time you hear them, it'll be too late to run. Joined: Mar 2009 Gender: Male Posts: 1,039 Location: Incoming Re: Alpha Strike: Letters from the 08th Corvis « Reply #3 on Nov 10, 2009, 8:58pm » Unfortunately, I can't seem to change the order in which posts appear... Link to Post - Back to Top   Logged Brothers-in-Arms: Aeon, Reds and Royals, Batou, John Galt, Shugotenshi, Scarper, WILLEM, Vesuviushetlan, Rolling Thunder Sisters-in-Arms: Sister Galatea, Makarova Quote: "Your cunning plan would have worked, if not for one thing. Me." - Rolling Thunder Current Record (W/L/D) 08th Corvis: 9-4-4 08th Corvis (5th Ed): 9-2-3 501st Emperor's Fists: 6-2-0 KaikelX WARLORD member is online Missing in Action. Presumed KIA Joined: Mar 2009 Posts: 1,196 Location: Unknown Re: Alpha Strike: Letters from the 08th Corvis « Reply #4 on Nov 10, 2009, 9:51pm » I know, I'm just saying maybe post a little hint up here.... But I like it. Interesting stuff. (The part where the maid drops the bottle and it breaks, and the First Citizen thinks about dealing with her later made me grin. Shows a sense of priorities ) Link to Post - Back to Top   Logged Major Kaikel Xiang: MIA Captain Kirlia Asis: MIA Inquisitor Lord Emery Rayet: MIA 482nd Hell's Bane: Location Unknown Julian Sharps WARLORD member is offline By the time you hear them, it'll be too late to run. Joined: Mar 2009 Gender: Male Posts: 1,039 Location: Incoming Re: Alpha Strike: Letters from the 08th Corvis « Reply #5 on Nov 11, 2009, 3:19pm » The First Citizen is a man of wealth and taste. However, he doesn't hold a candle to RT. Link to Post - Back to Top   Logged Brothers-in-Arms: Aeon, Reds and Royals, Batou, John Galt, Shugotenshi, Scarper, WILLEM, Vesuviushetlan, Rolling Thunder Sisters-in-Arms: Sister Galatea, Makarova Quote: "Your cunning plan would have worked, if not for one thing. Me." - Rolling Thunder Current Record (W/L/D) 08th Corvis: 9-4-4 08th Corvis (5th Ed): 9-2-3 501st Emperor's Fists: 6-2-0 nicholasakira WARLORD member is offline Living Laptop, Eldar player Joined: Mar 2009 Posts: 1,460 Location: Canada Re: Alpha Strike: Letters from the 08th Corvis « Reply #6 on Nov 15, 2009, 4:02pm » NaNoWriMo? You've really got to work hard on a story to get it finished in time. You still working on it? Link to Post - Back to Top   Logged Julian Sharps WARLORD member is offline By the time you hear them, it'll be too late to run. Joined: Mar 2009 Gender: Male Posts: 1,039 Location: Incoming Re: Alpha Strike: Letters from the 08th Corvis « Reply #7 on Nov 16, 2009, 9:11am » Unfortunately, I've been sidetracked by other (some say "more important") things. I've been meaning to work on Phase 4, but I just haven't had the time. Link to Post - Back to Top   Logged Brothers-in-Arms: Aeon, Reds and Royals, Batou, John Galt, Shugotenshi, Scarper, WILLEM, Vesuviushetlan, Rolling Thunder Sisters-in-Arms: Sister Galatea, Makarova Quote: "Your cunning plan would have worked, if not for one thing. Me." - Rolling Thunder Current Record (W/L/D) 08th Corvis: 9-4-4 08th Corvis (5th Ed): 9-2-3 501st Emperor's Fists: 6-2-0 Forum Jump--------------------» Home--------------------» General--------------------- News- General 40k --- Scenarios- Beginners Board- Picture Post- Painting and Conversions --- Imperial Guard Conversion Guide --- Painting Guides --- Terrain- Fluff- Rumors- After Action Reports--------------------» The Imperial Guard--------------------- General IG anything board.- Drop Troops- Infantry- Tanks- Tactics- Army List--------------------» The Great Universe--------------------- Allies of the Imperium. (Marines and The Inquisition)- The Eldar (Eldar and Dark Eldar)- The Forces of Evil. 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